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Reading Task, Week 10

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Today I will talk about how the peer review and the rewriting experience has gone over the semester. I have learned from the peer review task that I should add a bibliography at the end of every blog and add in text citations. I also need to start talking about the experience I have on the topic and how I feel about the topic which I have started to do in my recent blogs and plan to change on my previous blogs. I feel that my writing and reading skills have improved since my first feedback and even more since I got more feedback from other peers. I have received some great feedback overall to help me improve my blogs and know where I can make content easier and more enjoyable to read.

Concise writing goal is to use the most effective words. To use the stronger words not always fewer. To get to the main point of the topic. (Arts, 2021)

Too wordy sentences such as “It is the governor who signs or vetoes bills. – 9 words.

Concise sentence such as “The governor signs or vetoes bills. – 6 words.

This shows an example of the use of irrelevant words.

Expressions can be rhetorically effective for emphasis in some situations, but overuse or unnecessary use of expletive constructions creates wordy prose.

Take the following example: "It is imperative that we find a solution." The same meaning could be expressed with this more succinct wording: "We must find a solution". But using the expletive construction allows the writer to emphasize the urgency of the situation by placing the word imperative near the beginning of the sentence, so the version with the expletive may be preferable. This allows you to give feedback in a more concise way and to let you know that the matter is a vital importance or crucial. (Arts, purdue online writing lab, 2021)

Active voice is used for most non-scientific writing. Using active voice for many of your sentences makes the meaning clear for readers, it keeps the sentences from becoming too complicated or wordy. Such as scientific writing uses passive voice and can cloud the meaning of your sentences.

Examples, the brakes were slammed on by her as the car sped downhill - this is an example of a passive voice.

She slammed on the brakes as the car sped downhill – this is an example of an active voice sentence because the subject performs action. (Arts, purdue online writing lab, 2021)

I learned some good points that helped me when doing peer feedback. To ask yourself

what is the main point of the blog, does the essay flow well? Is any section unclear, is there not enough or too much evidence, Are the ideas original, is it too long or too short. Does it lack focus, could they expand or elaborate more on this idea, is it vague or confusing do you understand what it means, does it need better or more reliable sources, Is the style or tone inappropriate, Is the introduction or conclusion confusing in any way, did they cite correctly. Have they got too many errors? (Jared, 2018)

Since doing the feedback and receiving feedback I have learned that I notice from other blogs, what I must do if I’m critical on someone’s blog pointing out what id like to see, that I should have what I am looking for on my blogs.

Bibliography

Arts, C. o. (2021). purdue online writing lab. Retrieved from Owl:  https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/general_writing/academic_writing/conciseness/avoid_common_pitfalls.html

Arts, C. o. (2021). purdue online writing lab. Retrieved from Owl:  https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/general_writing/academic_writing/active_and_passive_voice/active_versus_passive_voice.html

Arts, C. o. (2021). Purdue Online Writing Lab. Retrieved from Owl:  https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/general_writing/academic_writing/conciseness/index.html

Jared. (2018, May 28). 15 Types of Essay Feedback and How to Address It. Retrieved from Kibin:  https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/types-essay-feedback-address/

 
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